Will you, asked the girl

Yes! proclaimed the boy

I didn’t ask yet, giggled the girl

Go ahead, said the boy

Will you love… began the girl

Yes! exclaimed the boy

I didn’t finish, smiled the girl

Go ahead, said the boy

Will you love me for all of our days, asked the girl

Yes… said the boy

And all of our nights too, asked the girl

Yes… said the boy

And the boy gathered the girl in his arms

And he loved her

For all of their days

And for all of their nights

And she loved him too

For all of their days

And for all of their nights

In their quiet cottage by the everlasting sea

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ellie894 September 2018

48 thoughts on “The Quiet Cottage by the Everlasting Sea

  1. “Everlasting sea” sounds like something from an English Romantic… or maybe from a Hindu scripture. How about Longfellow?: “This is the forest primeval,” or, “Footprints in the sands of time.”

    A nice compound, and you spare it until the very end. Just one suggestion: maybe use a different title to make the last line more of a surprise? It would add more punch.

    That’s my only critique. Have a great day 😀

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      1. You as well! BTW, Longfellow was an American. In his own time, he was better-known than Whitman, then later, public opinion changed. L. is said to have had more Euro influence on him, while W. was more raw American. Whatever. I think you’d like the former, tho.

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      2. Thank you!

        I do like Longfellow very much. And yes, probably more than Whitman. Sometime back I read and enjoyed Hiawatha. It has a wonderful use of language and rhythm to it.

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